Drafts, peer review reflections, in-class work and compositions-in-the-making, etc.
Working statement 12/2/16 Throughout the course, I have improved my writing process and developed the skills needed to interpret arguments across different modes of composition. From here, I need to
Artifact in Relation to Learning Outcomes 11/28/16 One of my artifacts from this semester is my spinning science project. This project had us compose a picture essay that made an argument about an advertisement. This project most clearly demonstrates my understanding of rhetoric. In the essay, I discuss the new iPhone 7 advertisement, breaking down the ad as a whole, as well as individual parts of the ad. One section I discussed was the new stereo speaker system in the phone. I said "By showing this feature in the boxing gym, it shows how the speakers are loud enough to play music in a large room. Using the visual of the white circles allows for the sound to be displayed in a way that the audience can see." This quote shows how I am rhetorically aware of who the ad is targeting and why it displays the images that it does. I continue to talk about other parts of the ad, such as its purpose, argument and design. By doing so, I am demonstrating my ability to communicate to different audiences what the rhetorical situation of the advertisement and my article is. This artifact emphasizes ..., but mainly standard written english.
Nim Blog Entry Revision 2/11/16 During the film, Nim learns a lot of signs and can display many different words, but still hurt people and other animals. This shows how, even though you can teach a chimp about some communication, they still have their animalistic instincts. (Start of new section) Also, Nim learns a lot of signs and skills during his time with humans, but everyone he stayed with had different motives for him. Thomas Sebeok, a critic of primate linguistic studies said, "The alleged language experiments with apes divide into three groups: one, outright fraud; two, self-deception; three, those conducted by Terrace. The largest class by far is the middle one." This quote says how you can always look at something and shift it to fit what you want to see, and this happened with Nim. He was taught hundreds of signs, but while he was working with different people, they were each looking for something different out of him. As a result, each researcher was essentially tricking himself into believing that his work with Nim was proving what he wanted to prove. There were no groundbreaking discoveries with Nim, just self deception from the researchers working with him that said the experiment was a success.
Topic and Declaration 10/30/16 The first text we will incorporate is “The Really Big One” by Kathryn Schultz. The second text we will compare and contrast it to is, “Uri Alon: Why truly innovative science demands a leap into the unknown”. In both texts we saw the value of wisdom being portrayed in different circumstances for very similar purposes. In both texts, the authors are communicating their esoteric knowledge to an audience that needs it most. Schultz is shining the spotlight on the huge problems that go along with the Juan De Fuca fault. The Juan de Fuca fault is rarely thought about which makes it difficult to create policy to combat a potential earthquake. Dr. Alon is revealing the faults of the scientific research process: graduate and doctoral students are never taught to deal with the struggle of discovery. Alon shares this knowledge with the audience and compares the presentations where he speaks about his scientific discoveries and says they are not as useful to a new scientist as his presentations on the cloud. The medium we will composing in is a website. We will compose our argument on different pages of the website and include different images that support our argument. The reason we chose these two texts was because they both portrayed the value of wisdom. Wisdom is described as having experience or good judgment. This is shown in the texts. For this project, we have assigned each group member a specific responsibility that they should fulfill in order to keep our project moving forward. Cam will be working a lot with the website because he knows how to work with the website makers very well, and he will be researching the different ways that we can apply the value of wisdom to our two texts. Ed and I will be working a lot to try and dig through the two texts to look for differences, similarities, and relations to the value of wisdom. Our tentative timeline for this project is to work on the project throughout the following week and finish the revised text before the due date. Once this is done, we will meet with Dr. Colvin and see what we can improve upon. After this, we will edit the project and practice our presentation.
Curious- 10/28/16 - Todd 1. Her argument in this piece of text is that curiosity is not a trait to hide, but one to express. 2. "For curiosity to have value, perhaps we have to allow it to be the beginning of something larger, to pursue it past the initial itch, the spark of hunger, the quick answer, the dopamine burst, to the “real investigation”" (Todd, 10) 3. This quote shows how cursiosity is an important trait to have. It is easy to think of curiosity as a negative, but harder to see what it can do in the long term. Curiosity can kill the cat, but when you allow it to feed your intuition, it can breed great potential.
Grasile 1. Her argument in the TED Talk is that you should be curious about things and cursious about what you can be curious about. 2. "You cant be curious about something if you don't know it exists." 3. Grasile mentioned this quote during her TED Talk and it shows how we don't know as much as we think we do. Even simply being curious about something is only possible if we know it exists, and we don't know a lot.
Transforming Tech Science Reflection Our group did a good job transforming the text from an informative video into a recruitment presentation. The Prezi allowed us to accomplish our purpose by organizing the information in a way that appealed to english 1101 students at Georgie Tech. If we did this project over again, I think the main change we would make is having less general information in the presentation and more persuasive language. When we presented to the class, I realized that a lot of what we said in the beginning of the presentation was not persuasive. We were talking about important information, but we weren't using it to “sell” the research positions enough. Our group stuck to our predetermined roles for the most part. Each group member fulfilled their role, but everyone helped everyone as well. I was research head, so I spent time researching the video and the actual research project on the Georgia Tech website. We diverted from our roles mostly at the end of the project when we were fine tuning the Prezi and script, which everyone worked on together. One of the biggest challenge we faced was finding information about the project. Even though the video was readily available, information about the project was much harder to come by.
Spinning Science Peer Review Overall, the best way for me to improve my project will be to have it focus on one central idea. If I make my examples support this idea as well, it will help my argument. I also need to better answer the "why" on some of my observations of the images.
Why talking dogs matter... It is important because it shows dogs in a new light and that dogs can help people in a way that hasn't been seen before.
Differences Between Two Articles
Popular Science vs. Gatech news
"Our ancestors" first walked on land vs. how first "land animal moves"
Simplified vs. more names
General audience vs. technical language, audience
To do this, they did this vs. long description
To the point, main details vs. longer, whole process
Puts the twist on it that this shows how our ancestors moved vs. discussing what data means
Introduction to Spinning Science Project https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q6dsRpVyyWs (Into Commercial to New iPhone 7) Yes thats’s right, after all a whole year of waiting, the next big piece of technology is here- the new iPhone. Throughout the 2 minute 12 second commercial, Apple talks about all of the new features of the phone. “Better, faster, and more powerful” are just a few of the words they use to describe the phone that everyone wants to have. The commercial shows images of pictures taken with the new camera of brilliant lights, videos of boxing, and motorcycle riding, all of which look great on the phone. When it comes to selling phones, Apple knows how to do it well. Their commercial employs several different persuasion techniques using different images that peak the interest of all audiences. The music in the commercial also suits it perfectly, being upbeat and bright with a techno feel. Even the narrator has a calm, convincing voice that makes everything he says sound groundbreaking. Without having held or seen the new iPhone in person, many people will see this 2 minute ad and have no hesitation in spending $600+ on a phone that will last them a year.
First Week Video Reflection: 1. My process in completing this video was relatively straightforward. I spent around 10 minutes gathering my thoughts, reading through the assignment sheet, and thinking about the WOVEN pages, then wrote a script. After the script, I started recording myself reading through it, making slight adjustments and edits throughout, then finally was satisfied with my recording after the 5th or 6th try. I felt like the pre-script period was very important in my process and the script writing was the least because I was easily sidetracked while writing.
2. I am most satisfied with the way the audio came out. I did not focus on having an interesting background or slides, but simply recorded myself for the video. This allowed me to edit the script down until it was just what I wanted.
3. If I could do redo any part of the process/ product, I would use something more creative as a background for the video instead of just me talking. Some of my friends said they used time lapses as the video, which I thought was cool. Also, I would spend less time writing the script and start recording earlier. Much of what I ended up saying was not originally in the script and I had to cut a lot out during the recording, so if I had started doing that earlier on, it would’ve saved me time